ESSAY的寫作方向一直是本科、商科及MBA申請中所關注的熱點問題!ESSAY提供給申請者思考的空間非常廣闊,基本上不會有什么限制,除了它給了你一個環(huán)境,那么怎么去“種”這朵“花”,那是你自己的事情了。很多時候,DIY們依然拘泥于修飾,這可能跟小學以來養(yǎng)成寫作習慣于贊美的緣故,華而不實的居多!那么如何面對來自美國的ESSAY?不妨先進性角色轉換,加入自己是一個美國人,很好,美國人習慣對人進行贊美,但解決問題或者進行敘事論述,他們確實喜歡的是直接,喜歡論據,例證!下面,讓我們一起來欣賞一篇非常有趣的ESSAY,OK,LET’S GO?。。。?!
范文:
A Boy’s Firsts
The boy is such a common boy. He is so common that only acquainted friends can notice him among the crowd; he is so common that he does not change his girlfriend one time per month, just as those playboys do; and he is so common that his daily life is no more special than those who listen to rock n’ roll, bet for soccer games and seldom clean their rooms.
However, the boy is somewhat special.
He usually thinks that, his experience and personal achievements, along with his own happiness and grievances, are enough for him to be unique, though he does not have a face as good-looking as Brad Pitt or Keanu Reeves, or whoever.
First Award
It was such a surprising gift for a 12-year-old boy to know that he had won the first prize in the national mathematics competition. The boy clutched the certification and laughed like a sun-flower blooming in a spring morning. He had spent three months preparing for that competition and had lost5kgweight but he was very happy, as happy as you could imagine. Enjoying the pace of enterprising, he began to believe “No pain no gain” that afternoon.
First Setback
Huddling up in the quilt crying, the boy was introspecting himself. For his haughtiness after achieving the second prize in the National Physics Competition, he deserved the rank of last 5% in the final examination of 7thgrade. Wiping up the tears, he set himself a promise of being humble and sober. The boy kept the promise and became a young man of great maturity.
First cooking
“Quite a tough work.” The boy said to himself, smearing soap on a blister caused by the burning oil. But a small blister never could stop him from doing his “cooking research”. The boy stood in front of the gas-stove again, holding apancake turner in his left hand, he was trying to find out the correct time of adding salt and the appropriate amount of other flavorings. After so many failures, he felt that it was not a simple task of cooking out palatable meals, nut a challenge of surpassing himself. When the boy finally finished working one and a half hours later, he put a sweet smile on his dirty face. The boy wrote in his diary, “keep working and you’ll win.”
First Love
At the age of 16, the boy fell in love with a smart girl. Eating ice-cream with the girl in the ice-cream bar at the street, walking on the boulevard hand in hand, cycling her home and kissing goodbye, he regarded love as the holy thing in his life. Thus, the boy demonstrates a love from heart; he cares everyone nearby and wants them to be beatific with their families. As people say, an angelic soul.
First Job
The extremely hot summer holiday of 16, the boy was excited when he got a job at the local train station as a ticket-taker. First working day, the boy got up so early that when he arrived at the station, the previous ticket-taker was still on his work, in astonishment of the boy’s appearance. But the ticket-taker did not know that, the boy was just so eager as to get on the job to show that he had grown up.
Soon a common college student will he be. A common one that will be assiduous in class and passionate in the basketball court; that will make every effort to run for the Chairman of the Student Union but may still face failure; that is no more special than those who spend half a day in libraries and forget to go to dinner when do researches in labs. But somehow he will be a unique college student, because he will have his own way of fulfilling his dreams.
And as you may know, the boy is me.
一口氣看完了嗎?那么我們來品一品它?好,一步一步看。。。。。
一、標題:
也許,這個標題不算非常特別,但是它引人注目,一個男孩的第一次,可能我們想到更多的是一些“第一次”,聯想到我們自己的“第一次”,興趣自然就產生了!
二、結構:
結合了“第一次”的標題核心,下面分別以男孩生活、學習及工作中的各個第一次進行闡述,涉及的面比較全,包括感情,給人的感覺非常豐富且完整。
三、措詞:
措詞比較灑脫,拖泥帶水,既看出一個青年人的活力,又從每個“一次”中發(fā)現這個BOY其實不是一般的BOY,他有著一種思想叫做執(zhí)著與專一!
四、思路:
學習——〉生活——〉感情——〉工作
這看起來更像一個循環(huán),從學習到工作,中間穿插著我們的日常生活和感情生活,這就是一個完整的人,一個完整的體現!
結束語:
一直強調ESSAY的寫作思維要開闊,要創(chuàng)新,但是在實際寫作中,卻是以過往的過眼云煙式的表面化寫作為多,當然,這篇ESSAY并沒有帶出學校對它的要求一起和我們見面,但是,從ESSAY本身的寫作,也許我們已經看不到那些虛華的痕跡,ESSAY需要的是一些“摸”得著的——不要玩虛的?。。。?!