原文
Statement of purpose which includes applicants reasons for undertaking graduate work, explanation of study interests, and their relation to the applicant's undergraduate study and professional goals.
The decision for me to become an industrial relations major was not really my own, I have to admit. My uncle, a human resource manager with Welch-Ally, spent the majority of every holiday gathering throughout my senior year of high school trying to dissuade me from becoming a business major. He would tell me, "This is a rare undergraduate degree and a growing field." Then he would frighten me by saying, "We have very similar personalities, so you would be a fantastic H.R. manager." Eventually he convinced me that it was my best option. And I haven't regretted it.
Although I credit my uncle with inspiring my initial decision, my constantly growing interest in this field and desire to continue my education has grown from two sources: the Industrial Relations faculty at Lemoyne and my vocation as a martial arts instructor for almost five years. From my professors, I have learned the practical side of my intended profession: the multitude of laws protecting worker's rights in the workplace, procedures for collective bargaining and arbitration, and how compensation systems function. My job, on the other hand, has helped me acquire the "people" skills that are crucial to being an effective H.R. manager. In the course of a normal workday, I must communicate with a diverse group of people ranging in age from three to seventy-two years old. Each student has unique needs and goals that I must identify and pay attention to. I must constantly evaluate students and give them constructive feedback, walking that fine line between support and criticism. At the same time, I delegate tasks to the less senior instructors and class helpers, while helping them improve their teaching skills. It is challenging and constantly educational. These two sources, my professors and my job, have succeeded in transforming a disinterested college freshman into a senior who has a focused career path.
My ultimate career goal is to be a general human resource manager or recruiter for a high-tech or pharmaceutical company. These are industries in which I foresee great potential for growth in the future. I enjoy every aspect of my major, and I look forward to the variety of tasks and obstacles I will face as an H.R. manager. The prospect of interacting with people on a daily basis appeals to me immensely in a job. Working as a recruiter likewise interests me because it would involve convincing potential employees to work for my company. This is precisely what I do at my current job. It is my responsibility to make new students feel at ease, develop rapport with them quickly, and then sell our program's values and benefits. All of my experience would be relevant and useful to a career as an H.R. manager.
Cornell University represents an attractive program for me because the curriculum is practical and many of the classes utilize computers and software specifically designed for human resources. Also, a Master's degree from a well-respected program like Cornell would be essential in helping me achieve my goal of working for a large, possibly Fortune 500 company. I ask that you examine my grades to see the discrepancy between my Freshman/Sophomore and Junior/Senior years. The change reflects my growing interest in industrial relations and my ability to balance working almost full-time with being a full-time commuting student. If accepted, I will bring to Cornell a strong academic background in human resources and hands-on management experience. I am extremely committed to my career goals, and I believe that attending Cornell will help me fulfill them.
譯文
這篇個(gè)人陳述包括了我申請(qǐng)研究生項(xiàng)目的理由,學(xué)習(xí)興趣的說(shuō)明,我本科階段的學(xué)習(xí)與這個(gè)項(xiàng)目之間的關(guān)系和我的職業(yè)目標(biāo)。
這個(gè)決定就我來(lái)說(shuō)成為勞資關(guān)系專業(yè)真的不是我特有的,我必須承認(rèn)。我的叔叔是一個(gè)人力資源管理經(jīng)理,他花了大半節(jié)假日時(shí)間聚集我高中學(xué)年來(lái)試圖勸我主修商科。他告訴我,“這是一個(gè)非常杰出的學(xué)位、一個(gè)正在成長(zhǎng)的領(lǐng)域”當(dāng)時(shí)他還用諺語(yǔ)嚇唬我“我們有非常相同的性格,因此你將成為一個(gè)荒謬的人力資源經(jīng)理?!弊詈笏_信那將是我最好的選擇。那樣我將沒(méi)有任何遺憾。
雖然我相信我的叔叔灌輸給我的最初的決定,但是在這個(gè)領(lǐng)域我逐漸增強(qiáng)的興趣和繼續(xù)學(xué)習(xí)愿望已經(jīng)成長(zhǎng)了,來(lái)自兩個(gè)來(lái)源:似曾相識(shí)的勞資關(guān)系的才能和我的將近5年的武術(shù)教師的職業(yè)。從我的教授那里我學(xué)到了我有意從事的職業(yè)的比較實(shí)用的一面:在車間,勞資雙方針對(duì)工資等問(wèn)題談判的程序和仲裁,和賠償制度的職責(zé)所有這些方面多數(shù)法律是保護(hù)工人的權(quán)利的。我的工作,在另一方面,已經(jīng)幫助我學(xué)到了人力資源管理這方面的技巧,這對(duì)于我成為一個(gè)出色的人力資源經(jīng)理是至關(guān)重要的。在正常的工作期間,我必須和不同的人群交流包括3歲到72歲的人們。每個(gè)學(xué)生都有不同的需求和目標(biāo)我必須識(shí)別和注意。我必須經(jīng)常的評(píng)價(jià)學(xué)生并且給他們建設(shè)性的反饋,在支持和批評(píng)之間要有獎(jiǎng)罰分明的線路。同時(shí),我給少數(shù)的高級(jí)教師和班級(jí)助手委派任務(wù)以便幫助他們提高教學(xué)技能。它是負(fù)有挑戰(zhàn)性的和教育性的。這兩個(gè)來(lái)源,我的教授和我的工作,已經(jīng)成功的轉(zhuǎn)化成了一個(gè)無(wú)私的學(xué)院,即新生進(jìn)入更高一級(jí)的職業(yè)通道。
我最終的職業(yè)目標(biāo)是成為一個(gè)普通的人力資源經(jīng)理或者招聘人員針對(duì)那些高科技或者藥物公司。這些行業(yè)是我預(yù)知的將來(lái)最有增長(zhǎng)潛力的行業(yè)。我喜歡我的專業(yè)的每一個(gè)方面,我期盼任務(wù)的變化和作為一個(gè)人力資源經(jīng)理我將面對(duì)的障礙。工作中每日與人的相互影響的前景無(wú)限的吸引著我。作為招聘人員同樣的使我產(chǎn)生興趣因?yàn)榱钊诵欧挠袧摿Φ穆毠ぜ磳槲业墓竟ぷ?。這正是我目前所做的工作。使新的學(xué)生感到自由自在、迅速的與他們發(fā)展和諧的關(guān)系然后出售我們的項(xiàng)目的價(jià)值和利益,這是我的責(zé)任。所有我的這些經(jīng)驗(yàn)對(duì)于一個(gè)人力資源經(jīng)理的職業(yè)生涯都是相關(guān)的和有用的。
對(duì)于我來(lái)說(shuō)康乃爾大學(xué)象征著一個(gè)有魅力的項(xiàng)目,因?yàn)樗恼n程是實(shí)用的并且多數(shù)上層社會(huì)利用計(jì)算機(jī)軟件特定的設(shè)計(jì)來(lái)做人力資源。而且,來(lái)自康乃爾大學(xué)非常受尊敬的一個(gè)碩士學(xué)位項(xiàng)目將從本質(zhì)上幫助我達(dá)到我要進(jìn)入世界500強(qiáng)公司的目標(biāo)。我要求你們檢查我的等級(jí)以便了解我的大學(xué)三年之間的差異。這個(gè)差異反映了我在勞資關(guān)系方面正在增長(zhǎng)的興趣和就一個(gè)專任的走讀生而言我對(duì)于平衡全部工作時(shí)間的能力。如果我被你們接受,我將帶給康乃爾大學(xué)堅(jiān)固的人力資源理論背景和我的管理經(jīng)驗(yàn)。我非常的終于我的職業(yè)目標(biāo),我相信參加康乃爾大學(xué)將幫助我實(shí)現(xiàn)我的職業(yè)理想。
文章點(diǎn)評(píng)
文章大綱
本文從結(jié)構(gòu)上來(lái)看,主要分為四大部分,第一部分主要是為下文作鋪墊,間接的強(qiáng)調(diào)自己學(xué)習(xí)勞資關(guān)系的強(qiáng)烈決心;第二部分是文章的核心,通過(guò)寫實(shí)的手法展現(xiàn)了自己的相關(guān)專業(yè)背景和優(yōu)勢(shì),不僅層次感很強(qiáng),而且描寫得很細(xì)致。第三部分激情澎湃的展現(xiàn)了作者的職業(yè)目標(biāo),在這里使文章升華到達(dá)高潮。第四部分結(jié)合自己的職業(yè)理想直接點(diǎn)明康乃爾大學(xué)此項(xiàng)目的優(yōu)勢(shì)以及我的加入能帶來(lái)的價(jià)值。
主題內(nèi)容
從內(nèi)容上來(lái)看,開(kāi)篇先用一句話簡(jiǎn)單介紹了文章的主要內(nèi)容;接著寫自己的叔叔就是人力資源的經(jīng)理,他一直全力勸說(shuō)自己主修商科,向自己灌輸商科是個(gè)非常有前途的領(lǐng)域。第二部分主要寫自己在勞資關(guān)系這方面的興趣逐漸增強(qiáng)以及自己的實(shí)踐經(jīng)歷,通過(guò)學(xué)習(xí)和實(shí)際工作,提高了自己在此方面的能力和技巧。第三部分主要寫自己的職業(yè)目標(biāo)是成為一個(gè)普通的人力資源經(jīng)理或者招聘人員針對(duì)那些高科技或者藥物公司,突出了自己對(duì)待這個(gè)領(lǐng)域的強(qiáng)烈興趣和責(zé)任感。第四部分直接指出康乃爾大學(xué)的課程設(shè)置比較實(shí)用,參加康乃爾大學(xué)有助于我實(shí)現(xiàn)進(jìn)入500強(qiáng)的職業(yè)目標(biāo),同時(shí)可以分享我的堅(jiān)固的學(xué)院背景和管理經(jīng)驗(yàn)。
素材取材
本文取材主要是自己的親身經(jīng)歷(第2、3段),其余全是敘述性的描寫,說(shuō)明自己的目的和計(jì)劃。全文主要圍繞自己的興趣展開(kāi),這是貫穿全文的一條主線。
本文立意
本文開(kāi)篇就先點(diǎn)明了自己意圖以及全篇的答題內(nèi)容,接著由自己的叔叔襯托自己強(qiáng)烈的興趣,給人以真實(shí)地感受,之后通過(guò)寫實(shí)和敘述重點(diǎn)突出了自己的興趣以及適合這個(gè)項(xiàng)目。
可以借鑒的地方
總體來(lái)看全文層次分明,邏輯合理,雖然跨專業(yè)申請(qǐng),但是非常自然,更多的強(qiáng)調(diào)了自己的興趣以及自己的學(xué)習(xí)和經(jīng)歷適合這個(gè)領(lǐng)域。語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練,主題表達(dá)明確,而且兼顧的方面較廣,同時(shí)也體現(xiàn)了自己的相關(guān)優(yōu)勢(shì)。最值得借鑒的一點(diǎn)就是用實(shí)際經(jīng)歷(叔叔對(duì)自己的勸阻)側(cè)面襯托,對(duì)于說(shuō)明自己強(qiáng)烈的決心和興趣顯得更有力度。
本文缺點(diǎn)
但是文章也有一定的缺點(diǎn),寫實(shí)的部分缺少個(gè)性的案例,因此對(duì)于自己在此專業(yè)方面的優(yōu)勢(shì)展示得有點(diǎn)少,如果補(bǔ)充進(jìn)去給人的印象將更加深刻;此外有的地方稍微有些啰嗦,有點(diǎn)畫蛇添足的意思,例如第四部分最后一句:“All of my experience would be relevant and useful to a career as an H.R. manager.”不過(guò)總的來(lái)說(shuō)這篇PS比較成功。
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