[Prompt: Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.]

Basci Training

"You may now alight, " boomed a loud voice over the ferry's intercom. Walking off of the ferry, I looked around in awe at the countless unfamiliar faces that shared a common fate: Basic Military Training Camp with the Singapore army. When I was younger, I had often laughed when my older friends departed for their three-month training. I quickly realized, however, that the first three months of my two-year national service would be no laughing matter.

With my first steps onto the sunny island of Pulau Tekong -- my new home -- I thought of Tony Blair's famous declaration: "It is the dawn of a new era." Apprehension overwhelmed me as I considered that my own life was about to take a drastic turn. Determined to make the most of the situation, I followed my orders to report to the auditorium, where I officially enlisted in the army.

My assignment placed me in Charlie Company, which was renowned for having the toughest training of all the companies in the island's two camps. Yet the first two weeks were not as horrible as I had envisioned. I spent my days doing foot drills and strength-building exercises, signing documents, and speaking with insurance representatives. In those first calm days, I frequently wondered why I had worried so much about basic training. I quickly discovered why.

Within another week, I was "falling in" at three in the morning, doing a hundred push-ups in the mud, spending hours practicing drills in the scorching sun, and marching ten miles with a 55-pound backpack. The Charlie Company officers worked hard to uphold their reputation as the toughest company, and my entire body ached to go home every day. Although each day seemed more grueling, I was surprised by how rewarding it felt to meet such a mentally and physically demanding challenge. The sense of accomplishment that I felt after three months of basic training was second to none.

Perhaps one of the most rewarding aspects of my time with Charlie Company was the friendship that developed among the eleven new recruits who shared a room with me. At first, I wondered how we would get along, given our divergent backgrounds. My own status as an honors student from overseas set me apart from the local polytechnic students and the poorly educated young men with whom I lived. As time went by, however, the camaraderie among the twelve of us grew into something that I have yet to experience again. Regardless of race, education, or religion, each recruit pushed the others to try harder, which in turn completely redefined our physical and mental limits. Knowing that eleven other people depended on me just as much as I depended on them made me understand the importance of teamwork.

After the monumental fifteen-mile march that marked the end of my military training, I was no longer the pampered teenager that I once was. My former lack of urgency, occasional tantrums, and childish outlook all dissipated after three months on the island of Pulau Tekong. Successfully completing the most challenging endeavor of my life has convinced me that I can accomplish anything. Now, I face challenges and hardships head-on; backing out will never again be an option.

Many of my friends who did not have to go through military service scoffed at the idea of postponing university for what they saw as a waste of time. I view it in a different light. For me, my time in the military was a golden opportunity that allowed me to discover the absolute limits of what I can achieve. Without a doubt, the basic training that began my military service was "the dawn of a new era" for me.

點(diǎn)評：

文章內(nèi)容：

文章主要講述的是作者在參加基礎(chǔ)訓(xùn)練支前、當(dāng)中、之后，對基礎(chǔ)訓(xùn)練的一個不斷地認(rèn)識和理解的過程中，以及態(tài)度的變化，得到的啟示，等等。

從第一段開始，作者的態(tài)度就在不斷的變化中，開始時為生活中將會出現(xiàn)的重大轉(zhuǎn)折而憂慮，接下來又因?yàn)殚_頭幾天的輕松訓(xùn)練而松一口氣------原來“并沒有想象中那么恐怖”，但是后來訓(xùn)練的加緊又讓他吃盡了苦頭。最后，在訓(xùn)練結(jié)束的時候，作者得出結(jié)論：原來事情不是之前想得那么恐怖，但是也沒有后來想的那么輕松。緊張的訓(xùn)練帶給他很多的收獲，改掉了不少的毛病也使自己更清楚地認(rèn)識到自己的潛能，使他的人生開始了一段新的旅程。

文章選題：

文章選擇自己的一次親身經(jīng)歷，軍訓(xùn)，對于很多人來說都會是一段很難忘的日子，很多人都從中得到很好的學(xué)習(xí)與鍛煉。寫軍訓(xùn)會使文章很有內(nèi)容可寫，不至于使文章過于膚淺簡單。

文章結(jié)構(gòu)：

優(yōu)點(diǎn)：
1）朱熹曾說“文須錯綜見意，曲折生姿”，強(qiáng)調(diào)文章要在曲折宛轉(zhuǎn)中別開生面。本文的結(jié)構(gòu)就有這樣的一個特點(diǎn)，作者看待基礎(chǔ)訓(xùn)練的態(tài)度在不斷的變化中成熟起來，最終有了一個對基礎(chǔ)訓(xùn)練的正確地認(rèn)識。
2）文章的結(jié)尾處呼應(yīng)前面提到的“新時代的黎明”，使文章更有整體感。

缺點(diǎn)：
1）文章在第五段之后突然轉(zhuǎn)到寫與室友的友誼，與前面的內(nèi)容稍微有些脫節(jié)。讓人有失去重點(diǎn)的感覺。
2）后面的第八和第九段，像是兩個結(jié)尾，而且么沒有結(jié)到一個點(diǎn)上，建議將后兩段的內(nèi)容融合到一起，這樣結(jié)尾就會更加精彩。

綜合點(diǎn)評：

文章總體來說有一個不錯的選題，從自己的親身經(jīng)歷出發(fā)，有感而法才能將自己的想法表達(dá)的清楚，才能產(chǎn)生共鳴。而且結(jié)構(gòu)也很新穎，不管是開頭還是文章語言本身，都能吸引讀者的閱讀興趣。另外，上面提到的結(jié)構(gòu)上的兩處不足需要改進(jìn)一下。

譯文：

基礎(chǔ)訓(xùn)練

[對一次你曾經(jīng)有過的經(jīng)歷，達(dá)到的成就，冒險或者你曾面臨的一次道德上的抉擇進(jìn)行評價，并說說它對你的影響。]

飛機(jī)渡運(yùn)處的對講機(jī)里嗡嗡的傳出一個響亮的聲音：“可以降落了?！睆娘w機(jī)上下來，我驚恐的看著周圍無數(shù)張陌生的臉，心想他們都要遭受著同樣的命運(yùn)：參加新加坡的基本軍事訓(xùn)練營。年輕些的時候，看著那些比我大一些的朋友為參加三個月的訓(xùn)練離開的時候我總是會笑。然而我很快意識到我兩年兵役的前三個月可不是什么能笑的出來的事。（Ｉ）

我剛踏上Pulau Tekong這個陽光明媚的小島----我的新家，就想到了Tony Blair的一句名言“這是新時代的黎明！”一想到我的人生將出現(xiàn)一次重大的轉(zhuǎn)折，我就被一種恐懼籠罩著。決定好充分利用這個環(huán)境之后，我按順序來到禮堂報到，這就是我爭使我正式參軍的地方。（Ⅱ）

我被分到了Charlie連隊(duì)，作為島上兩個營地中最嚴(yán)酷的一個連隊(duì)，Charlie連隊(duì)特別出名。但是剛開始的兩周并沒有我想象得那么恐怖。我花了幾天的時間來進(jìn)行足部訓(xùn)練和強(qiáng)化訓(xùn)練。在那幾天平靜的日子里，我常常奇怪我之前怎么會對基礎(chǔ)訓(xùn)練那么的恐懼呢。很快，我找到了答案。（Ⅲ）

接下來的一周，我每天臨晨三點(diǎn)北叫醒集合，做上幾百個俯臥撐，然后在驕陽下進(jìn)行幾個小時的操練，之后還要背著55磅的背包行軍。Charlie連隊(duì)的軍官們極力維護(hù)著他們“最嚴(yán)厲連隊(duì)”的榮譽(yù)，而我每天都要帶著渾身的酸痛回家。（Ⅳ）

盡管每天都比前一天讓人精疲力竭，但是讓我感到神奇的是：這種對生理和心理的雙重極限挑戰(zhàn)叫我如此受益。三個月的基礎(chǔ)訓(xùn)練結(jié)束時我的那種成就感是別人無法體會的。（Ⅴ）

在Charlie連隊(duì)，讓我受益最深的就是從11個和我同室的新兵那得到的友誼。開始我還擔(dān)心有著不同背景的我們該如何相處。我自己的身份----一個海外的乖學(xué)生，將我和其他同室的工藝?？茖W(xué)校的學(xué)生、沒有接受過什么教育的青年分割開來。然而，一段時間過去了，我們之間建立起了我多年之后一直沒有再遇到的同志般的友誼。不論種族、教育背景、宗教，每個人都激勵著彼此去努力嘗試，我們的身體和心靈都在不斷的成長。了解到十一個朋友都依賴著我，就像我依賴著他們一樣，我學(xué)到了團(tuán)隊(duì)合作的重要性。（Ⅵ）

一個紀(jì)念性的行軍之后，我結(jié)束了我的訓(xùn)練生活。我已不是以前那個稚嫩的少年了。以前那個缺少堅持、老發(fā)脾氣、眼界狹窄的我在Pulau Tekong三個月的軍訓(xùn)生活之后消失了。（Ⅶ）

成功的戰(zhàn)勝了生活中的很多問題之后，我覺得沒有什么事是無法完成的。現(xiàn)在，遇上了困難與挑戰(zhàn)我會迎面趕上，退縮永遠(yuǎn)不會使我的選擇。（Ⅷ）

我的很多不必服兵役的朋友覺得為了服兵役推遲上大學(xué)是件十分好笑的事情，但是我并不這么認(rèn)為，在軍隊(duì)的日子對于我來說是一段寶貴的經(jīng)歷。它讓我更清楚自己能力的極限。毫無疑問，服兵役前的基礎(chǔ)訓(xùn)練才是我的“新時代的黎明”?。á?nbsp;