Father was a Doctor

My mother often recounts a story about me following around my father, our small town’s internist, on a certain home visit. Upon finding a woman with a swollen, painful belly, he began palpating her abdomen -- when he noticed two tiny hands of a toddler, emulating his own. I cannot remember a time when I was not interested in health care. As I finished high school and entered college, however, I had my doubts. I grew up watching my father suffer the hardships of his career, from long hours and disappointments to the difficulty of providing adequate care under insurance regulations. Additionally, I wondered whether I was genuinely dedicated to medicine or whether I was simply infatuated with the idea of imitating the extraordinary individual that is my father. Indeed, with three members of my immediate family in medicine, I felt as though I was simply falling into the occupation. Today, however, I have come to realize that I did not merely fall into medicine -- I fell in love with the profession on my own accord.

One notable memory often reminds me that when I am providing any type of patient care, no matter how minor, I have the feeling that I am at home. As a lifeguard, I had the chance to provide first aid on several occasions, and I recall one such event very clearly. During the summer after a particularly difficult sophomore year in college, I was left with many questions, including whether medicine truly offered the best career path for me. Then, one afternoon I was watching the pool when a young girl, slipping from the waterslide, collided with another swimmer. She struggled out of the water in a panic, fearing a broken leg. Rushing over, as I calmed her and assessed her right leg, I suddenly had that familiar feeling: this was my calling. To date, nothing in my life has felt more natural than when I was caring for Marie by the pool that day. Consequently, in the past two years I have only sought to expand on my opportunities to participate in and provide medical care to others. Last year I completed my training and gained certification as an emergency medical technician, and only recently, I began volunteering with the Orange County Rescue Squad. Finally getting the chance to participate actively in patient care has proven tremendously fulfilling and has further solidified my commitment to the medical field.

Hoping to learn more about health care within hospitals, I volunteered at the University of North Carolina’s Resident OB/GYN Clinic in the Women’s Hospital. Here, the nurses and residents have taken extra time to explain their procedures and courses of treatment, while I have also actively taken part in the care of the patients. In the past year I have gained experience taking blood pressures, weights, and patient histories. I also spent a memorable night following Dr. Lois Aronson in the labor and delivery ward. During this period, I observed two deliveries and two surgeries, and I also learned to perform pelvic exams and find fetal heartbeats. My favorite part of the whole volunteering experience, however, must have been the chance to witness Dr. Aronson’s thoughtful and compassionate interaction with patients during normal prenatal checkups. While observing her careful communication skills, I developed my own approach to conversing honestly and caringly with patients.

To complement my hands-on experience preparing for my career as a physician, I have devoted my energy to preparing for the rigorous scientific education that must preface the training of any thoughtful and capable physician. When reflecting on my college career, one experience stands out as the most enjoyable learning experience of all: teaching an introductory biology lab at UNC for two semesters. This endeavor allowed me to assume the role of a mentor and an instructor. As I was responsible for the laboratory education of 25 students each semester, this undertaking taught me to become a communicative leader who can guide others in their educational development. Moreover, the sheer amount of pleasure I received from helping my students achieve their goals reflects my commitment to a career of service.

My mother always said, “Don’t be a doctor unless you have to.” I feel that I am truly beginning to understand what she means. I know that becoming a physician is a long, difficult path. I have witnessed the realities of medicine in my own home and have spoken with an exhausted medical student on the thirtieth hour of her shift. I also know that for me it is worth it. Nothing would make me happier than devoting my life to becoming a physician and delivering quality, compassionate health care. To achieve my goals, I look forward to medical school as the next necessary and welcome step.

分析：

通過兒時(shí)跟隨父親出診，自己模仿父親為病人檢查的動(dòng)作漸漸引出自己對醫(yī)學(xué)的興趣。但隨后話鋒一轉(zhuǎn)，矛盾產(chǎn)生了：進(jìn)入大學(xué)后，想想自己看到父親為事業(yè)而遭受的艱辛，自己思考是否是發(fā)自內(nèi)心的想從事醫(yī)學(xué)這個(gè)職業(yè)。為后來的陳述打下很好的伏筆。接下來通過幾件事——也就是矛盾的激化最后得到一個(gè)答案：自己心甘情愿的愛上了這個(gè)職業(yè)。第二段，大二的一個(gè)暑假救助一個(gè)撞斷腿的小女孩給作者留下了非常深刻的印象，護(hù)理病人給了作者極大的滿足并且鞏固了他獻(xiàn)身醫(yī)療領(lǐng)域的想法。第三段，寫自己在婦女醫(yī)院的北卡羅來納大學(xué)常駐OB/GYN診所做了一名志愿者，學(xué)會(huì)了更多關(guān)于醫(yī)療保健的知識。但自己收獲更多的是當(dāng)志愿者期間，跟隨Aronson博士學(xué)會(huì)了如何對病人更周道和體貼，如何更加真誠和體貼的與患者交談。也是自己對醫(yī)學(xué)熱愛的一個(gè)升華。第四段，寫了曾經(jīng)在大學(xué)生物實(shí)驗(yàn)室承擔(dān)兩個(gè)學(xué)期的教學(xué)工作，向?qū)Ψ皆u審委員會(huì)展現(xiàn)了自己的教學(xué)能力和領(lǐng)導(dǎo)能力，同時(shí)也緊扣主題，對事業(yè)的熱愛進(jìn)一步升華。最后一段，與第一段呼應(yīng)，表明作者通過以上的經(jīng)歷，已經(jīng)把醫(yī)學(xué)當(dāng)作自己一生的職業(yè)。

語言的描寫非常形象生動(dòng)，讓讀者能夠更容易接受，更容易產(chǎn)生共鳴。對整篇文章進(jìn)行總結(jié)，表現(xiàn)出自己對內(nèi)科醫(yī)生這項(xiàng)事業(yè)的工作信心。本篇文章，作者將興趣和對內(nèi)科醫(yī)生的熱愛作為自己展現(xiàn)的重點(diǎn)。文章所采用的邏輯主線是以時(shí)間為順序，將自己對所申請領(lǐng)域的認(rèn)識和理解的變化過程一步一步地展現(xiàn)了出來，對醫(yī)學(xué)的熱愛也一層層升華。通篇沒有華麗的辭藻，但很樸實(shí)準(zhǔn)確的表達(dá)了意思。字里行間把自己對于專業(yè)的熱愛非常強(qiáng)烈非常明確呈現(xiàn)在文章中。邏輯思路清晰，第一段提出論點(diǎn)，接下來三段進(jìn)行論證，最后一段首尾呼應(yīng)，作者整篇文章都將自己對于專業(yè)的熱愛作為描述的重點(diǎn)，更為成功的是這種感情的表述非常具體和形象，通過具體的事例具體的經(jīng)歷引申出自己的感受。因此給讀者的感覺是非常真實(shí)，非常具體。將自己在每個(gè)階段的認(rèn)識逐個(gè)描寫，清晰的將自己認(rèn)識的加深過程展現(xiàn)給錄取委員會(huì)，整篇文章因此條理性非常好。文章除了著力刻畫作者對專業(yè)的熱愛，對專業(yè)的認(rèn)識，同時(shí)還較好的呈現(xiàn)了作者的實(shí)習(xí)經(jīng)歷和教學(xué)經(jīng)歷。作為醫(yī)學(xué)專業(yè)，對專業(yè)的熱愛，對病人的關(guān)心是成為一名合格內(nèi)科醫(yī)生的基礎(chǔ)，因此把這個(gè)作為文章寫作重點(diǎn)是非常好的。

譯文：

當(dāng)醫(yī)生的父親

父親是我們小鎮(zhèn)的內(nèi)科醫(yī)生，我的母親經(jīng)常向我詳述關(guān)于我跟隨父親到病人家里出診的往事。在發(fā)現(xiàn)一名婦女腹部腫脹疼痛后，他開始為她的腹部做檢查 – 這時(shí)他發(fā)現(xiàn)有兩支小手在模仿自己。我對醫(yī)療保健非常感興趣。然而，因?yàn)槲彝瓿闪烁咧胁⑶疫M(jìn)入大學(xué)后，我對這一點(diǎn)產(chǎn)生了疑義。我的成長見證了我父親為了他的事業(yè)而遭受的艱辛，根據(jù)保險(xiǎn)規(guī)則為病人提供充分的醫(yī)療保障長時(shí)間困擾著他。另外，我想知道我是否真正地想要致力于醫(yī)學(xué)事業(yè)，或者是否我只是簡單情癡地仿效我的父親。的確，我有三個(gè)直系親屬在醫(yī)學(xué)，我感到我很自然的沉迷于這個(gè)職業(yè)。然而今天，我逐漸意識到我不僅僅沉迷于醫(yī)學(xué) -- 我很情愿的愛上了這個(gè)行業(yè)。

有一個(gè)深刻的記憶經(jīng)常浮現(xiàn)在我的腦海，當(dāng)我為病人提供護(hù)理時(shí)，無論多細(xì)微的，我都感覺我是在家。作為救生員，我有機(jī)會(huì)幾次提供急救，并且我非常清楚的記得這么一次經(jīng)歷。在特別艱苦的二年級結(jié)束的夏天，老師留給我許多問題去思考，包括醫(yī)學(xué)是否真的是我最佳的職業(yè)。后來的一個(gè)下午，當(dāng)我在監(jiān)視一個(gè)游泳池的時(shí)候，看到一個(gè)女孩從滑水道滑下的時(shí)候與另一位游泳者撞到了一起，她帶著驚恐和害怕掙扎著出了水面。我趕忙沖了過去，我讓她保持了鎮(zhèn)定并且仔細(xì)檢查了她的右腿，我突然有那么一個(gè)熟悉的感受：這就是我的職業(yè)。迄今，生活中沒有什么比我那天為Marie在水池邊提供救助來的自然。此后，在過去二年中，我一直在尋找機(jī)會(huì)為其他人提供護(hù)理。去年，我完成了我的訓(xùn)練并且獲得了緊急救護(hù)師證書，只在最近，我開始跟隨Orange County Rescue Squad做了一名志愿者。有機(jī)會(huì)積極地參與住院病人護(hù)理給了我極大的滿足并且進(jìn)一步鞏固了我獻(xiàn)身醫(yī)療領(lǐng)域的想法。

為了能在醫(yī)院學(xué)會(huì)更多關(guān)于醫(yī)療保健的知識，我在婦女醫(yī)院的北卡羅來納大學(xué)常駐OB/GYN診所做了一名志愿者。在這里，護(hù)士和醫(yī)生拿出了業(yè)余時(shí)間來向我講述他們的規(guī)程和治療過程，而我也積極的參與到了在護(hù)理患者的行列中。我在去年有了測血壓、體重和病史的經(jīng)驗(yàn)。我也跟隨Lois Aronson博士在產(chǎn)房度過了難忘的一個(gè)晚上。在這期間，我觀察了二次分娩和二次外科手術(shù)，并且我也學(xué)會(huì)如何檢查骨盆和胎兒心跳。然而，整體當(dāng)志愿者期間，我最大的收獲就是有機(jī)會(huì)見證Aronson博士在正常產(chǎn)前檢查時(shí)對病人的周道和體貼。當(dāng)留意了她出眾的交流能力后，我也學(xué)會(huì)了更加真誠和體貼的與患者交談。

為了提高我的實(shí)踐能力，同時(shí)也是為我今后作醫(yī)師做準(zhǔn)備，我把精力都投入到了嚴(yán)格的學(xué)習(xí)準(zhǔn)備當(dāng)中，因?yàn)槲艺J(rèn)為那是勝任一個(gè)出色醫(yī)師的基礎(chǔ)?；仡櫸业拇髮W(xué)時(shí)代，一段最令人愉快的經(jīng)歷浮現(xiàn)在我的腦海： 在UNC一個(gè)初級生物實(shí)驗(yàn)室承擔(dān)兩個(gè)學(xué)期的教學(xué)工作。 作為講師，我毎學(xué)期負(fù)責(zé)25名學(xué)生的實(shí)驗(yàn)室指導(dǎo)，這段經(jīng)歷教我成為一個(gè)于易于溝通的領(lǐng)導(dǎo)者。而且，我從幫助我的學(xué)生達(dá)到他們的目標(biāo)的過程中感受到了快樂，更反映出我對服務(wù)事業(yè)的熱愛。

我的母親總經(jīng)常說，“除非你別無選擇，否則不要當(dāng)醫(yī)生”。 我認(rèn)為我真正開始懂得了她的意思。 我知道成為醫(yī)師需要經(jīng)過一個(gè)艱苦而漫長的過程。我曾經(jīng)在我自己的家見證了醫(yī)學(xué)的實(shí)質(zhì)，也曾經(jīng)和一個(gè)值班30個(gè)小時(shí)，疲憊不堪的醫(yī)學(xué)院學(xué)生交流過。 我也知道我值得為它做些事。沒有什么能比成為一個(gè)醫(yī)生來為我的病人提供高質(zhì)量的醫(yī)療服務(wù)而讓我感到快樂。我把醫(yī)學(xué)院看作我實(shí)現(xiàn)人生目標(biāo)的一級不可獲缺的石階。