Veterinary Background

Changing the bandage on an angry bulldog’s paw or trimming the hooves of a 2000-pound draft horse can be an intimidating venture. Curing animals requires compassion, precision, and confidence; it is also an excellent way to learn about practicing medicine and to feel the satisfaction of helping someone in need. Due to my rural background, knowledge of animals, and love of science, I began working for a local veterinarian at a young age. Later in life, when I decided to become a physician, I saw that my veterinary experiences had prepared me well for a career in health care.

When I started volunteering in an emergency room, I learned that humans really aren't so different from other animals -- I needed to show my compassion in order to earn their trust before I could heal or comfort them. When a child or widow brought me their dying pet and pleaded for me to cure it, I had to soothe the person as well as the animal. I used this calm compassion in the emergency room when comforting the family of a father who had just suffered a heart attack, or when talking with a husband frantic about his wife’s car accident. I saw further similarities between human and animal medicine when I shadowed Dr. Harry Williams in his family practice. I saw that his close relationship with his patients led him to keep thinking of them long after his office closed for the day. Likewise, as a veterinary technician, I had often carefully considered how to help each animal. Compassion is truly a prerequisite for any career in health care.

In my work with animals, I learned that perseverance is key to successful treatment. Interruption of that treatment can lead to disastrous results. In many rural communities near my home, I witnessed the consequences of the absence of consistent medical care. As a farrier, I have worked in many old-order Mennonite communities whose needs aren’t being met: when one client's daughter injured her hand in a corn sheller, she was unable to get medical care because facilities were far away and no doctors could come to their farm. The girl’s hand was infected and not healing well. I did what I could, but I was troubled that I didn’t have the expertise to treat the injury. On my next visit, I saw that her hand had grown deformed. Had she been able to see a physician more frequently, her hand might have healed correctly. Encounters of this kind have revealed to me the consequences of medically underserved communities. I look forward to working toward a solution to this problem when I am a physician.

A good veterinarian operates with precision. I have applied the careful, exacting skills I learned with animals to my lab work. I am currently involved in research on corneal endothelium with Dr. Carson Kennedy. In the lab, we study mammalian corneal cells; eventually, we would like to describe and prevent ophthalmic diseases such as glaucoma. Through this work, I have honed my scientific skills and sharpened my analytical mind. It is exhilarating to catch a glimpse of valuable knowledge, not yet known by anyone, which has the potential to help many people. It is also very rewarding to know that I have contributed to the advancement of medicine by providing research results that will improve people’s health.

Perhaps the most important quality required to practice human or animal medicine is confidence. In the lab, in the emergency room, and in the field, I have had many opportunities to observe the importance of confident leadership to a medical practice. Over the years, I have observed that the best veterinarians and physicians handle each issue swiftly and appropriately, delegating tasks to others with self-assurance. In every medical situation, someone must take the lead role while working to manage the team. Leadership roles have always come naturally to me -- I spent twelve years working toward becoming an Eagle Scout and helping my younger brother to do the same. The composure I gained as a troop leader helped me to excel in my role as supervisor at a large walking horse farm. Since then, I have grown into leadership roles that required more significant responsibilities. I am comfortable as a leader because I am confident in my ability to ensure the health and safety of others. The leadership skills I have developed will be a vital part of my work as a physician.

When I began working as a veterinary technician, I did not fully realize that the skills I gained would be so applicable to my eventual career as a physician. Yet my experiences with animals have provided me with an excellent foundation to continue my studies of human health and well-being. I am eager to develop the medical knowledge I have gained thus far in order to become the kind of physician my community will be able to rely on.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：

這是一篇申請(qǐng)醫(yī)學(xué)的文章是很成功的。說(shuō)實(shí)話我是很喜歡的。

我們看一下這篇文章的結(jié)構(gòu)：

第一部分，開(kāi)頭。在這部分開(kāi)門見(jiàn)山的點(diǎn)中了題目，獸醫(yī)的經(jīng)歷。

第二部分，延伸引入。光看了開(kāi)頭讓人很迷惑，怎么獸醫(yī)的來(lái)申請(qǐng)醫(yī)學(xué)了呢。所以這里解釋引入一下，高速別人，我之前的經(jīng)歷和和現(xiàn)在的申請(qǐng)有關(guān)系的。

第三部分，主體。這里主要是在講自己的醫(yī)學(xué)上的經(jīng)歷，跟老師做實(shí)驗(yàn)也好，還是之前的社會(huì)活動(dòng)，結(jié)合這些事情來(lái)說(shuō)自己在醫(yī)學(xué)上的認(rèn)識(shí)，非常的真實(shí)也令人信服。而且作者的邏輯性很強(qiáng)，由潛到深的敘述，一切都顯得那么自然。雖然很多東西都是專業(yè)的東西，但是結(jié)合他所說(shuō)的東西并不顯得枯燥。

第四部分，升華。通過(guò)對(duì)主體部分的總結(jié)，寫出了自己對(duì)專業(yè)的一些看法，領(lǐng)導(dǎo)能力對(duì)于外科醫(yī)生非常重要。并且詳細(xì)的寫出了自己的觀點(diǎn)。

第五部分，結(jié)尾。在升華的基礎(chǔ)上，點(diǎn)名了自己的目的，說(shuō)出了自己的目標(biāo)。

可以說(shuō)這篇文章的格式是相當(dāng)?shù)臉?biāo)準(zhǔn)的，一共是6段，分為很標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的5個(gè)部分。結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，讓人可以很清晰的知道作者要表達(dá)的思想和內(nèi)容。不像很多作者在做文章的時(shí)候太散太亂。這篇文章中我最喜歡的就是這點(diǎn)。而且這篇文章的中心很明確，并且用獸醫(yī)的經(jīng)歷把整個(gè)文章串了起來(lái)?？梢哉f(shuō)獸醫(yī)的經(jīng)歷就好像是一根繩子，牢牢的把各個(gè)部分有機(jī)的連接起來(lái)，讓人看到文章的時(shí)候第一個(gè)感覺(jué)就是整體感好。

文字方面我也是比較喜歡的，那就是作者駕馭文字的能力，他并沒(méi)有選擇賣弄他的文字工地，而是很準(zhǔn)確的使用了文字。很多詞都用的恰到好處，這是值得我們學(xué)習(xí)的。因?yàn)橛泻芏嗌暾?qǐng)者一味的注意文字的絢麗，并且在這方面追求的有點(diǎn)走火入魔，最終撿了芝麻丟了西瓜。再有，這篇文章的另外一個(gè)優(yōu)點(diǎn)就是邏輯思維好。

我認(rèn)為這篇文章最大的劣勢(shì)是，在這里過(guò)多的描述了專業(yè)方面的興趣。作者通過(guò)很多的事例，由淺入深的來(lái)描述他對(duì)于專業(yè)的興趣。為什么他要選擇這個(gè)專業(yè)，這個(gè)專業(yè)有什么意義。他對(duì)于這個(gè)專業(yè)的看法，他的一些真實(shí)的想法。但是這些東西畢竟有些空。在這里我相信更重要一些的是他的專業(yè)能力，也就是說(shuō)他作為一個(gè)醫(yī)生來(lái)講的能力。必須要展示一下。我相信有很多人都能在認(rèn)識(shí)上達(dá)到作者的這個(gè)高度，但是專業(yè)上呢？這里應(yīng)該有專業(yè)的展示。但是很可惜我在文章里沒(méi)有找到。

譯文：

獸醫(yī)背景

給一個(gè)憤怒的牛頭犬的爪子或者是一個(gè)2000磅重的大馬的蹄子換繃帶是一件冒險(xiǎn)的事情。 給動(dòng)物做治療是需要愛(ài)心，細(xì)心和自信的。這也同樣是一種出眾的方式來(lái)學(xué)習(xí)醫(yī)學(xué)的實(shí)踐和會(huì)讓人在幫助你需要幫助的人或動(dòng)物的時(shí)候感覺(jué)到滿足。 由于我鄉(xiāng)下背景，對(duì)動(dòng)物的愛(ài)，以及對(duì)科學(xué)的熱情，當(dāng)我還很小的時(shí)候我就為一個(gè)當(dāng)?shù)氐墨F醫(yī)工作了。 稍后，當(dāng)我決定成為一個(gè)醫(yī)師的時(shí)候，我發(fā)現(xiàn)我的獸醫(yī)經(jīng)歷已經(jīng)很好的在醫(yī)療方面為我提供了寶貴的經(jīng)歷。

當(dāng)我開(kāi)始在一個(gè)急診室中當(dāng)志愿者的時(shí)候，我發(fā)現(xiàn)人類和其他的動(dòng)物真是石油很大的不同 -- 在我治療和安慰他們之前，我必須要以我的熱情讓他們信任我。 當(dāng)一個(gè)孩子或寡婦帶給我他們的垂死的寵物而且希望我救治他們, 我必須讓人和動(dòng)物同時(shí)平靜下來(lái)。

當(dāng)安慰一個(gè)心臟病發(fā)作父親的家庭的時(shí)候，我在急診室中用了這一招, 或當(dāng)一個(gè)出車禍的女人的丈夫說(shuō)話的時(shí)候。 當(dāng)我跟著Dr. Harry Williams做家庭練習(xí)的時(shí)候，我發(fā)現(xiàn)人類和動(dòng)物更為相似的一面。 正工作了一天之后，他還很關(guān)心他的病人，一直在想并考慮病人的相關(guān)問(wèn)題。 同樣地，當(dāng)做一個(gè)獸醫(yī)的技術(shù)人員時(shí)，我時(shí)常小心地考慮該如何幫助每只動(dòng)物。 醫(yī)德對(duì)于作為醫(yī)生來(lái)說(shuō)最重要的。

在我和動(dòng)物的工作中，我了解了毅力是成功的治療關(guān)鍵。治療的中斷能導(dǎo)致?lián)p失慘重的結(jié)果。 在我的家附近的許多的社區(qū)，我目擊了缺少一致醫(yī)療的結(jié)果。 身為一個(gè)獸醫(yī)，我已經(jīng)為old-order Mennonite communities里的一些有一些需要但是沒(méi)有被實(shí)現(xiàn)的人工作了很多： 因?yàn)闆](méi)有設(shè)備，而且沒(méi)有醫(yī)生可以到達(dá)他們的農(nóng)場(chǎng)，所以當(dāng)一個(gè)客戶的女兒在一個(gè)玉米剝殼器中傷了她手的時(shí)候，她不能夠得到應(yīng)有的醫(yī)療照護(hù)。 女孩的手被感染而且痊愈得不好。 我做了所有我能做的，但是我沒(méi)有任何處理這樣事情的經(jīng)驗(yàn)。 當(dāng)我第二次取看她的時(shí)候，我看見(jiàn)有的那只手長(zhǎng)成了畸形。如果她能及時(shí)的找到一個(gè)醫(yī)生，她的手會(huì)恢復(fù)像她沒(méi)受傷前一樣。 像這類遭遇顯示了社區(qū)醫(yī)學(xué)服務(wù)不周到的結(jié)果。如果我能成為一個(gè)醫(yī)生，我想我會(huì)解決這樣的問(wèn)題了。

一個(gè)好獸醫(yī)在做手術(shù)的時(shí)候一定要下手準(zhǔn)確。 我已經(jīng)在現(xiàn)在的實(shí)驗(yàn)室里的試驗(yàn)中用到了我在做獸醫(yī)的時(shí)候?qū)W習(xí)到的小心又精確的技術(shù)。 我現(xiàn)在正在和Dr. Carson Kennedy一起做角膜移植方面的研究。 在實(shí)驗(yàn)室中，我們研究哺乳動(dòng)物的角膜細(xì)胞; 最后，我們可以理解和預(yù)防一些眼科疾病比如說(shuō)白內(nèi)障。 通過(guò)這樣的工作，我已經(jīng)磨練了我的專業(yè)技能和分析能力。 發(fā)現(xiàn)有價(jià)值的知識(shí)是令人欣喜的, 尤其是那些還沒(méi)有被很多人知道, 并且有可能幫助到很多人。我已經(jīng)知道可能會(huì)改善人的健康的研究結(jié)果成為醫(yī)學(xué)的進(jìn)步。

也許最重要的一點(diǎn)是必需的提升人類或者動(dòng)物對(duì)醫(yī)療的信心。 在實(shí)驗(yàn)室中，在急診室中, 和在這個(gè)領(lǐng)域中，我已經(jīng)有許多機(jī)會(huì)觀察一個(gè)自信領(lǐng)導(dǎo)對(duì)于醫(yī)學(xué)聯(lián)系的影響。 數(shù)年以來(lái)，我觀察過(guò)很多優(yōu)秀的獸醫(yī)和外科醫(yī)生很快速很恰當(dāng)?shù)奶幚砹撕芏嗖∪? 對(duì)病人充分的展示了自己的信心在各種醫(yī)療情況下，有個(gè)人比如要但當(dāng)起領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的角色必須有人要有效的管理和領(lǐng)導(dǎo)這個(gè)團(tuán)隊(duì)。 領(lǐng)導(dǎo)角色對(duì)我來(lái)說(shuō)是很自然地—我為了成為Eagle Scout用了我12年的時(shí)間并且我也在幫助我弟弟做同樣的事情。 在我通過(guò)在一群人中的領(lǐng)導(dǎo)地位得倒了冷靜，幫助了我在養(yǎng)馬的農(nóng)場(chǎng)里像一個(gè)導(dǎo)師。之后，我已經(jīng)發(fā)展成了更多的重要工作的領(lǐng)導(dǎo)。 因?yàn)槲掖_信我有能力可以保障其他人的安全和健康，所以我當(dāng)我是領(lǐng)袖的時(shí)候很滿足。 我的領(lǐng)導(dǎo)才能是我作為一個(gè)醫(yī)師的重要部份。

當(dāng)我開(kāi)始擔(dān)任一個(gè)獸醫(yī)的技術(shù)人員的時(shí)候，我不完全了解我得到的技術(shù)會(huì)對(duì)我作為一個(gè)醫(yī)師有很大的幫助。我和動(dòng)物的經(jīng)驗(yàn)為我提供一個(gè)優(yōu)良的基礎(chǔ)讓我繼續(xù)我的人類健康的研究。 我熱切于研究醫(yī)學(xué)知識(shí)，這是建立在我能夠被信任的基礎(chǔ)上的。