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Veterinary Background

Changing the bandage on an angry bulldog’s paw or trimming the hooves of a 2000-pound draft horse can be an intimidating venture. Curing animals requires compassion, precision, and confidence; it is also an excellent way to learn about practicing medicine and to feel the satisfaction of helping someone in need. Due to my rural background, knowledge of animals, and love of science, I began working for a local veterinarian at a young age. Later in life, when I decided to become a physician, I saw that my veterinary experiences had prepared me well for a career in health care.

When I started volunteering in an emergency room, I learned that humans really aren't so different from other animals -- I needed to show my compassion in order to earn their trust before I could heal or comfort them. When a child or widow brought me their dying pet and pleaded for me to cure it, I had to soothe the person as well as the animal. I used this calm compassion in the emergency room when comforting the family of a father who had just suffered a heart attack, or when talking with a husband frantic about his wife’s car accident. I saw further similarities between human and animal medicine when I shadowed Dr. Harry Williams in his family practice. I saw that his close relationship with his patients led him to keep thinking of them long after his office closed for the day. Likewise, as a veterinary technician, I had often carefully considered how to help each animal. Compassion is truly a prerequisite for any career in health care.

In my work with animals, I learned that perseverance is key to successful treatment. Interruption of that treatment can lead to disastrous results. In many rural communities near my home, I witnessed the consequences of the absence of consistent medical care. As a farrier, I have worked in many old-order Mennonite communities whose needs aren’t being met: when one client's daughter injured her hand in a corn sheller, she was unable to get medical care because facilities were far away and no doctors could come to their farm. The girl’s hand was infected and not healing well. I did what I could, but I was troubled that I didn’t have the expertise to treat the injury. On my next visit, I saw that her hand had grown deformed. Had she been able to see a physician more frequently, her hand might have healed correctly. Encounters of this kind have revealed to me the consequences of medically underserved communities. I look forward to working toward a solution to this problem when I am a physician.

A good veterinarian operates with precision. I have applied the careful, exacting skills I learned with animals to my lab work. I am currently involved in research on corneal endothelium with Dr. Carson Kennedy. In the lab, we study mammalian corneal cells; eventually, we would like to describe and prevent ophthalmic diseases such as glaucoma. Through this work, I have honed my scientific skills and sharpened my analytical mind. It is exhilarating to catch a glimpse of valuable knowledge, not yet known by anyone, which has the potential to help many people. It is also very rewarding to know that I have contributed to the advancement of medicine by providing research results that will improve people’s health.

Perhaps the most important quality required to practice human or animal medicine is confidence. In the lab, in the emergency room, and in the field, I have had many opportunities to observe the importance of confident leadership to a medical practice. Over the years, I have observed that the best veterinarians and physicians handle each issue swiftly and appropriately, delegating tasks to others with self-assurance. In every medical situation, someone must take the lead role while working to manage the team. Leadership roles have always come naturally to me -- I spent twelve years working toward becoming an Eagle Scout and helping my younger brother to do the same. The composure I gained as a troop leader helped me to excel in my role as supervisor at a large walking horse farm. Since then, I have grown into leadership roles that required more significant responsibilities. I am comfortable as a leader because I am confident in my ability to ensure the health and safety of others. The leadership skills I have developed will be a vital part of my work as a physician.

When I began working as a veterinary technician, I did not fully realize that the skills I gained would be so applicable to my eventual career as a physician. Yet my experiences with animals have provided me with an excellent foundation to continue my studies of human health and well-being. I am eager to develop the medical knowledge I have gained thus far in order to become the kind of physician my community will be able to rely on.

結(jié)構(gòu)解析：

這是一篇申請(qǐng)醫(yī)學(xué)的文章是很成功的。說(shuō)實(shí)話我是很喜歡的。

我們看一下這篇文章的結(jié)構(gòu)：

第一部分，開頭。

在這部分開門見山的點(diǎn)中了題目，獸醫(yī)的經(jīng)歷。

第二部分，延伸引入。

光看了開頭讓人很迷惑，怎么獸醫(yī)的來(lái)申請(qǐng)醫(yī)學(xué)了呢。所以這里解釋引入一下，高速別人，我之前的經(jīng)歷和和現(xiàn)在的申請(qǐng)有關(guān)系的。

第三部分，主體。

這里主要是在講自己的醫(yī)學(xué)上的經(jīng)歷，跟老師做實(shí)驗(yàn)也好，還是之前的社會(huì)活動(dòng)，結(jié)合這些事情來(lái)說(shuō)自己在醫(yī)學(xué)上的認(rèn)識(shí)，非常的真實(shí)也令人信服。而且作者的邏輯性很強(qiáng)，由潛到深的敘述，一切都顯得那么自然。雖然很多東西都是專業(yè)的東西，但是結(jié)合他所說(shuō)的東西并不顯得枯燥。

第四部分，升華。

通過(guò)對(duì)主體部分的總結(jié)，寫出了自己對(duì)專業(yè)的一些看法，領(lǐng)導(dǎo)能力對(duì)于外科醫(yī)生非常重要。并且詳細(xì)的寫出了自己的觀點(diǎn)。

第五部分，結(jié)尾

在升華的基礎(chǔ)上，點(diǎn)名了自己的目的，說(shuō)出了自己的目標(biāo)。

點(diǎn)評(píng)：

可以說(shuō)這篇文章的格式是相當(dāng)?shù)臉?biāo)準(zhǔn)的，一共是6段，分為很標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的5個(gè)部分。結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，讓人可以很清晰的知道作者要表達(dá)的思想和內(nèi)容。不像很多作者在做文章的時(shí)候太散太亂。這篇文章中我最喜歡的就是這點(diǎn)。而且這篇文章的中心很明確，并且用獸醫(yī)的經(jīng)歷把整個(gè)文章串了起來(lái)。可以說(shuō)獸醫(yī)的經(jīng)歷就好像是一根繩子，牢牢的把各個(gè)部分有機(jī)的連接起來(lái)，讓人看到文章的時(shí)候第一個(gè)感覺(jué)就是整體感好。可以說(shuō)，很多時(shí)候?qū)W生在做個(gè)人陳述的時(shí)候，都喜歡簡(jiǎn)歷試的羅列，一個(gè)個(gè)人陳述洋洋灑灑的XX段，看得我頭都大了。并且都是一種純的羅列試描述，我做了什么，通過(guò)多少時(shí)間得到了什么結(jié)果，純的描述。沒(méi)有任何的邏輯思維，給人的一個(gè)感覺(jué)，就是亂。除了達(dá)到了簡(jiǎn)歷的效果之外什么都得不到。亂糟糟的，我看了都頭疼，你想想那些天天看材料看到要吐的評(píng)審委員會(huì)成員們會(huì)怎么看你的這個(gè)東西呢？我想這個(gè)就不用我來(lái)說(shuō)了吧。

良好的文章結(jié)構(gòu)代表了良好的邏輯思維能力。這個(gè)是毋庸置疑的，并且從我得到的一些信息來(lái)看，我至少是相信一點(diǎn)，就是評(píng)審委員會(huì)的人在看你文章的時(shí)候，同時(shí)也是在看你的邏輯思維能力，畢竟做科研的人，沒(méi)有一個(gè)良好的邏輯思維能力是不可能的。專業(yè)固然重要，但是我們要掌握怎么去表現(xiàn)我們的專業(yè)。簡(jiǎn)歷有簡(jiǎn)歷的用處，有它應(yīng)該體現(xiàn)的點(diǎn)，PS有PS應(yīng)該體現(xiàn)的點(diǎn)，如果你想把簡(jiǎn)歷做成PS，如果你想把PS組成簡(jiǎn)歷，這是什么？前者，畫蛇添足；后者，照貓畫虎反類犬。都是四不像的東西，并且掩蓋住了我們本應(yīng)該體現(xiàn)的點(diǎn)。這樣你真的就認(rèn)為你的PS就是好的PS嗎？

好的PS不在于文章的形式，不在于內(nèi)容怎么寫，不在于開頭怎么寫，沒(méi)有一個(gè)定式，沒(méi)有一個(gè)模板，沒(méi)有一個(gè)套路。但是核心是一樣的，體現(xiàn)我專業(yè)的深度，或能力。那么怎么把你的文章組織好，用一個(gè)很好的線串聯(lián)起來(lái)。邏輯思維的體現(xiàn)。切記簡(jiǎn)歷試PS，你有沒(méi)有這樣的想法？有，必要改正。